Period 3:
Draft Three: Stream of Consciousness
1. Examine your flashbacks. Find moments where your character can include digressions, get stuck on topics, trail off, etc. You are trying to replicate or reproduce how the character’s mind works.
2. Write these flashbacks using stream of consciousness.
When you have completed this part of the story project, please move on to our final draft version: style.
After our inspirational video, please complete draft 2 of the Hemingway Project. Use your time constructively in class. Write. If you need a break, read Hemingway. But do not bother others. You may find it helpful to sit apart from your best friend and siren.
If you finish draft #2, you may move on to draft #3. (See below...)
Period 4:
You should have a first draft (labeled first draft...)
You should have a second draft (labeled second draft). Make sure you have ITALICIZED your flashbacks!
Then move on to draft 3. Keep this draft separate (copy your second draft and paste it in the same file as a copy. Then edit/add stream of consciousness...label this draft DRAFT #3.
Draft Three: Stream of Consciousness
1. Examine your flashbacks. Find moments where your character can include digressions, get stuck on topics, trail off, etc. You are trying to replicate or reproduce how the character’s mind works.
2. Write these flashbacks using stream of consciousness.
When you have completed this part of the story project, please move on to our final draft version: style.
Draft Four: Style & Syntax: Sentence length
1. Keep your sentences short and declarative in your non-flashback section of the story. Remember dialogue sounds more realistic when you speak in short sentences or fragments.
2. In your flashback scenes, find moments where you digress and create long, complex sentences. Use em dashes to indicate digressions. Use semicolons ; to connect related clauses (but don't over use these). Use commas to make a simple sentence into a complex one. Use an ellipsis … to indicate trailing off. Use repetition of a phrase to expand or stress a comment. Repetition can be anaphora, epistrophe, or epimone, for example. See the link for repetition for more obscure types...
Ex: “They knew who had shot their fathers, their relatives, their brothers, their friends…”;
Use conjunctions to add phrases to your independent clauses (and, or, but, etc.)
3. Try to find a rhythm in your writing. Most paragraphs start out with short sentences (or end with them). This allows for a certain length of speed. Then as your sentences get longer and more complex, you can slow or speed the eye of the reader. Usually, you want important information to be delivered slowly. The use of repetition helps create a meter and rhythm for your sentence structure.
After completing draft 4, proofread your draft. Add details where necessary for clarity (remember setting, character, theme...), and cut unnecessary details. You may also focus on fine-tuning your work by examining the effectiveness of your diction and tone.
1. Keep your sentences short and declarative in your non-flashback section of the story. Remember dialogue sounds more realistic when you speak in short sentences or fragments.
2. In your flashback scenes, find moments where you digress and create long, complex sentences. Use em dashes to indicate digressions. Use semicolons ; to connect related clauses (but don't over use these). Use commas to make a simple sentence into a complex one. Use an ellipsis … to indicate trailing off. Use repetition of a phrase to expand or stress a comment. Repetition can be anaphora, epistrophe, or epimone, for example. See the link for repetition for more obscure types...
Ex: “They knew who had shot their fathers, their relatives, their brothers, their friends…”;
Use conjunctions to add phrases to your independent clauses (and, or, but, etc.)
3. Try to find a rhythm in your writing. Most paragraphs start out with short sentences (or end with them). This allows for a certain length of speed. Then as your sentences get longer and more complex, you can slow or speed the eye of the reader. Usually, you want important information to be delivered slowly. The use of repetition helps create a meter and rhythm for your sentence structure.
After completing draft 4, proofread your draft. Add details where necessary for clarity (remember setting, character, theme...), and cut unnecessary details. You may also focus on fine-tuning your work by examining the effectiveness of your diction and tone.
HOMEWORK: Complete your Hemingway draft if you did not complete it during class this week (there should be four drafts, each one making your work stronger) I'm interested in the last draft, but keep all your drafts in the same file. Make sure you have numbered them!
Turn in your draft when you have completed it (all 4 draft versions in one file please) with an MLA formatted heading (your name, the name of the assignment, the class, and the date...); print out or submit your work to our Google classroom by Tuesday, March 12.
Finally, complete the collection The Snows of Kilimanjaro by Ernest Hemingway by reading "The Short Unhappy Life of Francis MacComber". Please bring your texts back with you to our next class to discuss the book.
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